The crit has posed many questions towards the project and I am happy to say the feedback I received has given both me and Josh lots of new possibilities for where we can take the project. We are now less attached to the idea of having the work stemming from a concept and are a lot happy to move forwards just expressing ourselves in this collaboration. After a suggestion about from one of my peers about how location relates to any of the themes, we have decided to make Richmond Park the location and focal point of the piece—as it serves as a place of sanctuary from the busy city life of London for both Josh and I.
Here are the notes I made during the session:
-poetry central stage
-perform poetry? partial? whisper?
-journey? moving?
-make poetry stand out?
-how much is intentional?
-make more cohesive as a whole
-how can loops be integrated?
-does location relate to any themes?
-lots of things to engage with (sound, visual, poetry, movement)
-play with rhythm
-how can motion be applied
-type writer hand written poetry
Here are my some more possible ideas after our conversation (some make less sense than others):
-macro taoist landscape -> micro fungal toe networks
-soil sound poetry
-poems appearing on type written, written notes, text message, etc.
-brief intermissions/ memories
-crazy collector dvd packaging featuring typewritten poems and drawings, inspired by cd packages I have collected